Looking for Feedback - Webpage re-write

Last Update: May 09, 2012

Those who have chatted with me via the WA chat are probably already aware of the fact that my parents are trying to sell their house in hopes of being able to re-locate to Florida. I just completed the re-write of their home page, and would love some feedback. I have incorporated a few keywords, and want to make sure its not overstuffed, and sounds OK.

The original site is: http://www.ct-estate.com for comparison purposes.

Here's the re-write:

Are you looking for a home that is close to everything, yet still retains the country charm of years gone by? Then this New England luxury home for sale may just be the perfect answer to your home buying wish list.

Situated on over 34 rolling acres of oak trees, evergreens and wildlife, this CT luxury home, built in 2001, is a hidden gem in the New England countryside.  Imagine spending warm summer nights on the back patio, glass of wine in hand, star gazing. Imagine what it would be like to view shooting stars from your own backyard without interference from city lights.

Then, when the weather turns cool, imagine snuggling in front of a crackling fire place as the first snowflakes of the season begin to fall. With each changing season you will find new wonders which may leave you wondering why you did not stumble upon this hidden New England gem sooner.

This New England luxury home for sale also offers the right level of features for those who may be looking to live off the grid. Equipped with an indoor Bio Heat wood furnace connected to the hydro heat system, it offers the owner the ability to stay warm and toasty all winter long from wood.

Worried about what should happen if you run out of wood? Have no fear; the oil furnace immediately kicks in should the wood supply run low. This CT luxury home is also equipped with an automatic back-up LP gas generator system that kicks on as soon as the lights go out, providing additional security and all the luxuries of home when you need it most.

This CT luxury home also offers ample fields and a 4 bay carriage shed, should you want to keep horses or other livestock on site. Should farming be more your forte, the fields offer plenty of planting area for a wide range of fruits and vegetables, perfect for an off the grid lifestyle.

Should an abundance of storage and workspace for all your hobbies be more your forte, this New England luxury home for sale also offers 8 garage bays, five of which are located in the house, offering an expansive amount of storage that is unheard of in most communities.  There is also a separate 3 bay 54' x 38' heated garage which features three 10' x 8' garage doors plus a 14' x 12' rear garage door, allowing a drive-through bay, with a car lift.  A half bath, plus walk-up storage, complete the auto enthusiasts dream workshop, or the ultimate man cave.

Boaters will also love this New London county luxury home because it is close enough to Southeastern Connecticut marinas, yet far enough above sea level ensuring your personal possessions are safe from flooding that can be common in coastal communities.

Want to learn more about this New England luxury home for sale? Click on the Contact Us tab and fill in the necessary information, or call the phone number listed at the top of the page. We look forward to hearing from you!

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Labman_1 Premium
Looks good, liked the way you painted a picture of the various possibilities. You overused should a bit toward the end but not too bad. Might want to rework a couple of sentences but overall a pretty good promotion.
Deezdz Premium
Very enticing..sounds great. Doesn't come across as keyword stuffing at all.
smokeywins Premium
Thanks! Hubby did a read through right after I posted it and he said the same. My keywords didn't jump out at him.
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