Looks pretty good. Here are some ways to improve it:
-break up the groups so that you have at least 4 text modules, this seems to be the magic number that squidoo prefers.
-put some anchor text to your hoplink in the beginning and scattered around, you could use my linker here to mask the hoplink as well.
-add some pictures to your text module. You can make these clickable after you upload them, just put your hoplink below the box where you upload it
-you could turn that "who will win" module into an interactive module with the poll module (under popular modules in edit mode). Reader participation is great for a lens.
Hope this helps!

Hey its: http://www.squidoo.com/hot-world-cup-2010-tips I haven't had ANY viewers yet but i'm hoping its a "grower" as the world cup is still a month away...who knows, i may be barking up the wrong tree...but at least its a start! Any feedback would be great

Good job. What is it so we can check it out and give stars?

Cool! Congratulations for your lens! :)

Hammersmith is great, that would be an awesome gig to see! Congrats on your 1st lens Shaun, nice to have ya in the WA family.